Good so far
The kick has too many overtones, imho. Try lowpassing or EQ'ing.
Also, the melody near the end isn't agressive enough. Copying the melody at an octave could remedy this. In fact, the kick's overpowering the melody. But this can be fixed with lowpass or EQ. Personally, I prefer EQ.
You've really got something good going with this song, but I don't think it qualifies as Hardstyle just yet. Just extend it and add to it.
--alex
p.s., I agree. Hardstyle is very under appreciated and under rated. It saddens me that the world guzzles happy hardcore and anthem trance as fast as the producers are cranking out their albums. People need to learn to pace themselves.